Paper 1 practice #2

We were supposed to have a paper 1 practice #2 before the december break but it got rescheduled to after the break. I took this time to plan for the second practice of a paper one essay which was meant to be a commentary over one of the works written by Moira Donegan a columnist for the guardian who also is a feminist. We have read 6 of her articles in class, which all discuss women’s rights more importantly how they are violated and oppressed she demonstrates this through of sexual assault and laws regarding abortion.

We had to choose one of the articles we had read in class and use it for the essay writing. I choose the article that discussed the passing of fetus rights in alabama and how fetesus were now considered real people. This article discussed how the passing of these laws granting fetuses rights, lead to the oppression of women’s rights. Moira was able to use a great example for proof. She introduced a case where a pregnant women got shot causing the baby to die which then lead to her being charged with manslaughter. This example set a great tone, especially how it was the first section in the article. task was to examine how effective Moira was with the use formal and stylistic techniques to fulfill her purpose. The structure of this article seemed confusing at first and I wasn’t sure what formal techniques she had used and more importantly how to organise my 3 points in an essay. I eventually decided what my 3 points were and in what order I can organise them as I was going to separate my points based on the different sections of the article. This was a great idea because the quotes for each point I would use as evidence were in the same order as the my structure. This helped me focus on the main points of each section and how Moira used different various devices. The way that Moira had structured her essay was very convenient for the structure I was going to write my paper 1 #2 in.

After practicing with my 3 desired points which were structure,tone and irony I noticed how I could break down one of my points into 2 points and that was tone. I broke down tone into word choice and tone. I decided that I was gonna discuss how she used word choice to set the tone of the article and thus showing her emotions/attitudes towards the laws being passed but she was using word choice to also exploit and trigger the audiences emotions throughout the article. So I had 4 body paragraphs, my irony point wasn’t very well supported due to me rushing since i had no time left and the lack of evidence of quotes.

Regardless I believe the essay went well I was able to finish during class time (thanks to Mrs.Leong allowing us to write our introduction´s the last class) . The only thing I need to think about for next time is to be a lot more organized with my points and not too repetitive. I was able to explain to what extent Moira used her different formal devices/techniques and their effect on her readers.